you write individual scenes so well and it's always a delight seeing that to create the picture by which a thousand ships sail is such a wonderful part of prose and i adore it here in particular - the sense of unease and dissatisfaction aya feels, spinning her wheels over the step to a world she should know better than to touch.
and miki's curiosity about a woman who knows how to keep her mouth shut, despite those ever-watching eyes, noticing things that most people would know to keep their gaze down from.
the sense of aya's burgeoning adulthood, that she's wearing like an ill-fitting suit rather than any part of who she is - the teenaged embarrassment, and miki's delight, in knowing that someone like this would still be willing to jump through the looking glass of danger. how miki pulls and how aya pushes back, snapping her fingers in rather than away - "Aya-chan" "/Miki/"
it's beautiful, it's such a beautiful spark of a moment that leads to a forest fire and i love it thank you for filling this!!!
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and it's always a delight seeing that
to create the picture by which a thousand ships sail is such a wonderful part of prose and i adore it here in particular - the sense of unease and dissatisfaction aya feels, spinning her wheels over the step to a world she should know better than to touch.
and miki's curiosity about a woman who knows how to keep her mouth shut, despite those ever-watching eyes, noticing things that most people would know to keep their gaze down from.
the sense of aya's burgeoning adulthood, that she's wearing like an ill-fitting suit rather than any part of who she is - the teenaged embarrassment, and miki's delight, in knowing that someone like this would still be willing to jump through the looking glass of danger. how miki pulls and how aya pushes back, snapping her fingers in rather than away - "Aya-chan" "/Miki/"
it's beautiful, it's such a beautiful spark of a moment that leads to a forest fire and i love it thank you for filling this!!!